Saturday, May 23, 2009

behind your eyes

I notice
that the sun
forgot to set

in that world
that glows
behind your eyes

there, where the snowy egret
still flies

why on earth should it ever land
while its wings
are still draped in golden light

and the sand so smooth
under its flight

and why
should this creaking world
even think
of turning

or the twilight think of falling

while love still
leans over
whispering
to its own heart

and I and the day
still hold up the night
for a moment

while those crazy stars
try to rise

here, in the world I find
behind your eyes

9 Comments:

Blogger Devika Jyothi said...

Wonderful dear bird, a fine rendition, loved every line of it :)

"or the twilight think of falling"

that could be 'twilight thought of falling'?

your poems are really enagaging my dear bird, i love to read it again and again..it opens up as a flower each time :)

love,
devika

Saturday, May 23, 2009 at 10:14:00 AM EDT  
Blogger Yes said...

Devika--I love when you say you read it again and again (and opening like a flower!) It makes me feel so appreciated...
That line is the end of the thought "why would the twilight think of falling"...

Saturday, May 23, 2009 at 12:45:00 PM EDT  
Blogger Devika Jyothi said...

oh yes, yes, fire bird...I get it...i was slightly lost there :)

i love your poems for so many reasons...imageries, fine choice of words, pure thought, passion that runs through...et al :)

devika

Saturday, May 23, 2009 at 1:15:00 PM EDT  
Blogger Lorraine said...

your words flow like melodies, and I love each sigh...

Sunday, May 24, 2009 at 7:28:00 AM EDT  
Blogger Yes said...

Devika--Wow, thanks, you said so much, and I love every word of it!

Lorraine--I think your comment flows like a melody too...and I am definitely trying for that feeling!
Thanks so much for sharing...

Monday, May 25, 2009 at 2:11:00 AM EDT  
Anonymous Paul Maurice Martin said...

Wow - really evokes looking into someone's eyes...

Monday, May 25, 2009 at 3:43:00 PM EDT  
Blogger Yes said...

Paul--Your comment means a lot to me, because I was hoping these images were not too abstract for someone else to relate to--it's hard to describe the indescribable--but of course you know that, and do it yourself very well!

Monday, May 25, 2009 at 4:08:00 PM EDT  
Blogger Janice Thomson said...

Love the way you start this Firebird - so romantic and yet profound at the same time with the most delightful imagery. I also like your use of a partial rhyming scheme :)
Beautiful flow of words and thoughts as well.

Tuesday, May 26, 2009 at 10:37:00 PM EDT  
Blogger Yes said...

Janice--I do so appreciate your commenting, because you notice so much! I am starting to play with partial rhymes--having fun!
Thanks for your wonderful and supportive feedback!

Tuesday, May 26, 2009 at 11:17:00 PM EDT  

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