Saturday, March 08, 2008

when we were jelly

no question, then
we spent our days

rolling bonelessly
into hollows
of dunes

escaping the hungry
of the sea

then, when
you split me in two
it tickled

like those stray feathers
by the newly molting sun

in half-formed nights
of crystallizing light

our mouths were still too soft
to speak
and our hearts so quiet

that the stars
were as thunder


Anonymous paul maurice martin said...

and our hearts so quiet

that the stars
were as thunder

Stark and sudden expression of that kind of deep quiet. Really made the stars kind of jump out in my mind.

Saturday, March 15, 2008 at 10:51:00 PM EDT  
Blogger firebird said...

Thanks, Paul--I appreciate your liking that phrase--great to have your comment!

Tuesday, March 18, 2008 at 12:07:00 AM EDT  
Blogger Pat Paulk said...

What line in here isn't amazingly crafted. I think maybe our mouths should be so soft again, and all we wanted to do was catch the stray feathers of the sun. A magical piece of writing!!

Monday, March 24, 2008 at 7:53:00 PM EDT  
Blogger firebird said...

Pat--you truly made my day with your comment! Thanks for stopping by with a piece of sunshine...

Thursday, March 27, 2008 at 12:30:00 AM EDT  
Blogger Pat Paulk said...

Youse guys eat grits??? Growing up we had em for supper with fish. Is it warming up way up yonder?

Thursday, March 27, 2008 at 7:25:00 AM EDT  
Blogger snowsparkle said...

firebird, chills of joy rippled through me reading this. your words and beauty are astounding. thank you, big hugs, snowsparkle

Sunday, March 30, 2008 at 4:51:00 PM EDT  
Blogger firebird said...

Pat--Fish and grits sounds quite yummy! I've seen it on the menu at the local Caribbean restaurant in Brooklyn...but I'm still partial to grits and eggs...
Today was starting to feel like Spring, FINALLY! The daffodils are starting, along with crocuses and other little gems...

Ss--Gosh, if I can cause "chills of joy" in anyone, that makes it all worthwhile--especially when it's you! And your comments are always to die for...!

Tuesday, April 1, 2008 at 11:00:00 PM EDT  
Blogger MB said...

rolling bonelessly

Many lovely images in this!

Monday, April 14, 2008 at 1:46:00 PM EDT  
Blogger firebird said...

mb--always a treat to have you stop by...thanks always!

Monday, April 14, 2008 at 8:10:00 PM EDT  
Blogger mermaid said...

When we melt and lose our own outline, we can see outside ourselves.

i love the imagery.

Wednesday, May 7, 2008 at 6:20:00 PM EDT  
Blogger firebird said...

mermaid--Wow, what a wonderfully poetic and insightful comment!
Wish I had thought of that myself...thanks so much!

Wednesday, May 7, 2008 at 7:31:00 PM EDT  

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