Thursday, December 07, 2006

you want forever

you want forever
here it is

floating in the lake
below the weeds

in the falling petals
that darken in my eyes

roots reaching back
unseen

you want forever
here it is

reach out your hand
like a river through sand

forever
melts through your fingers

like sugar
in a tropical sea

7 Comments:

Blogger MB said...

You paint with your words such a feeling in this of slow motion, dissolving, mingling, fading into and away at the same time.

Thursday, December 7, 2006 at 1:11:00 PM EST  
Blogger Pat Paulk said...

I hope you're sending some of these gems off for publication. I feel a sense of exasperation in this(I'm probably wrong), like forever doesn't mean the same thing to the speaker and the one being spoken to. Your imagery is spectacular!!

Thursday, December 7, 2006 at 6:32:00 PM EST  
Blogger Yes said...

mb--I guess that's my impression of the illusion of forever...hope it is a positive image!

pat--Thanks so much for your kind encouragement! I have very little information about what is out there...any ideas or advice would be appreciated! (If you want, you can e-mail me at viv4evermore@yahoo.com)

Your "sense" is accurate, I'm sure, since forever is a very slippery concept, and the basis for many misunderstandings...!

Friday, December 8, 2006 at 12:01:00 AM EST  
Blogger snowsparkle said...

firebird, this is stunning! the imagery and concept, so beautiful! as always... you totally amaze me! thank you for this gift!

Friday, December 8, 2006 at 9:20:00 AM EST  
Blogger Yes said...

ss--Thank you for the gift of your beautiful comment! Means a lot to me...

Saturday, December 9, 2006 at 1:05:00 AM EST  
Blogger gracie said...

just the sound of 'sugar' on the lips reading the last lines is delicious!!!

Wednesday, December 13, 2006 at 7:32:00 AM EST  
Blogger Yes said...

gracie--I like the image of you saying the poem out loud as you read--that would be cool, I haven't got the hang of it quite yet...
Glad you liked "sugar", kind of feels like a kiss on the lips to say it!

Friday, December 15, 2006 at 12:42:00 AM EST  

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