you want forever
you want forever
here it is
floating in the lake
below the weeds
in the falling petals
that darken in my eyes
roots reaching back
unseen
you want forever
here it is
reach out your hand
like a river through sand
forever
melts through your fingers
like sugar
in a tropical sea
here it is
floating in the lake
below the weeds
in the falling petals
that darken in my eyes
roots reaching back
unseen
you want forever
here it is
reach out your hand
like a river through sand
forever
melts through your fingers
like sugar
in a tropical sea
posted by Yes at 11:26 AM
7 Comments:
You paint with your words such a feeling in this of slow motion, dissolving, mingling, fading into and away at the same time.
I hope you're sending some of these gems off for publication. I feel a sense of exasperation in this(I'm probably wrong), like forever doesn't mean the same thing to the speaker and the one being spoken to. Your imagery is spectacular!!
mb--I guess that's my impression of the illusion of forever...hope it is a positive image!
pat--Thanks so much for your kind encouragement! I have very little information about what is out there...any ideas or advice would be appreciated! (If you want, you can e-mail me at viv4evermore@yahoo.com)
Your "sense" is accurate, I'm sure, since forever is a very slippery concept, and the basis for many misunderstandings...!
firebird, this is stunning! the imagery and concept, so beautiful! as always... you totally amaze me! thank you for this gift!
ss--Thank you for the gift of your beautiful comment! Means a lot to me...
just the sound of 'sugar' on the lips reading the last lines is delicious!!!
gracie--I like the image of you saying the poem out loud as you read--that would be cool, I haven't got the hang of it quite yet...
Glad you liked "sugar", kind of feels like a kiss on the lips to say it!
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