at end of day
at end of
day
pages
turn
and close
gently, gently
brilliant
incomprehensible
day
garlands
of faces
gems
ripe
falling
soft eyes
smiling
windless
whisper
rainbow fading
train
receding
mind closing
eyes
opening
sight
bright
infinite
thought
fading
no
longer
needed
day
pages
turn
and close
gently, gently
brilliant
incomprehensible
day
garlands
of faces
gems
ripe
falling
soft eyes
smiling
windless
whisper
rainbow fading
train
receding
mind closing
eyes
opening
sight
bright
infinite
thought
fading
no
longer
needed
posted by Yes at 11:50 PM
2 Comments:
I love this poem. Everything you've done here is wonderful! There are so many things I enjoy about it.
First of all, the structure works so well! The one word lines and the simplicity add to the tone beautifully. As I read down the length of this poem I feel as though I'm descending from wakefulness into the land of dreams.
I also love your use of tense, "falling" "smiling" "fading" "receding" "closing" "opening". It makes me feel as though this poem is happening to me as I read it!
I dug your idea of "mind closing/ eyes/ opening" "thought...no longer needed". That's a very cool idea that you captured really well.
I could go on and on about this one. This is definitely one of my favorite peices you've done.
Ahh. Nicely done!
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